Talk:2017 Africa Cup of Nations final/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:17, 7 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Not sure why those three refs are in the lead, either ref the lot or none of it (my pref) and put those refs in the main body.
Removed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Could add in the lead a brief summary of how each side got to the final.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"represented CAF at" explain before using.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"the civil war in that country" is there a link for it?
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"2 (1986,..." that 1986 is overlinked.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"the 1986 and 2008 tournaments" they're both overlinked.
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:59, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Egypt were 35th in..." Prior to the final?
At the start of the tournament. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
There's an article for 2017 Africa Cup of Nations Group A.
Added link. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not mad keen on (a) the coloured tables (b) the decorative icons (c) the lack of ACCESS consideration and (d) the auto-collapsed group tables.
I've removed the flags from the results, and also axed the group tables. Not sure what ACCESS issues you think there are here? — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Column scopes. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 15:05, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Perhaps make it clear that each team played one another just once in the group stage?
I've added the tournament format to Background. — Amakuru (talk) 11:59, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"close-range foal" leave your horse on the sideline please.
Neigh. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Sébastien Siani has an accent.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link penalty area.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I think "follow up" in that context should be hyphenated.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"quarter finals" vs "quarter-final" hyphen or nay?
I've gone with yes. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"saves to Mané" saves to? saves against? saves from?
I've amended to "saves to shots from Mané..." does that work?
Link extra time.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"couldn't" - avoid contractions.
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Penalty shoot-out " link to the association football one.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link "penalties" to penalty kick.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"give a 4–4 score" eh? -> making it 4–4?
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Vincent Aboubakar scored again" had he scored already?
No. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"the semi-final.[15] Their semi-final" repetitive.
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Egypt's 2017 Africa Cup of Nations campaign" might have been better to link the tournament itself in the first "route to the final" section?
You'd think so, wouldn't you. I think happened because I swapped the two teams around at some point.
"competing in Group D " could link 2017 Africa Cup of Nations Group D.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link header.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"two chances for" to score.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"missed good chances" good per whom?
Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"they'd" avoid contractions.
Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Link cross.

Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
And free-kick.
Done on first mention (and all dehyphenated). — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Romain Saïss has a diacritic.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Essam El Hadary - our article doesn't hyphenate El-Hadary.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Mohamed Elneny opened the scoring" full stop.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"9pm" etc, non-breaking space before the pm.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link kit.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"attacking rhythm" bit newspaperish for me.
Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"in attack it was the Egyptians who were more comfortable at half time" grammar and ^{[according to whom?]}?
Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"lack of attacking potency" bit repetitive.
Removed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"before gathering" what?
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Link "lob".
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"held on two win" to
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Where are all the officials referenced?
I've removed them, apart from the ref himself. Most matches don't seem to list that info. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
In Aftermath, Héctor Cúper needs diacritics.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
It's Valencia CF not Valencia F.C.
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
It's The Guardian.
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Is BBC Sport italicised (per ref/article) or not (per article)?
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
E.g. ref 34 has spaced hyphen, should be en-dash. Check others.
Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's my first pass, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 10:45, 7 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: I've finished looking at your points so far. Cheers — Amakuru (talk) 11:59, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look as soon as I can, I'm somewhat under the gun to get the UEFA Euro 1972 Final done, but working on it....! The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 12:02, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The "report" link just redirects to the CAF homepage.
I've switched to using the BBC page. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
On that note, where are the formation indicated in the graphic noted/sourced?
The BBC page covers that thankfully. I made a small tweak to the positions of Bassogog and Moukandjo in the SVG file so they match. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
For consistency, all online refs need access-dates, e.g. ref 35.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
You have BBC Sport in the prose and BBC Sport in the refs.
This was a result of a CITE REPAIR job which took place a few days ago... I've switched the prose to italics to match.
And then oddly, Twitter (which is a website) appears non-italics, yet CNN which is a publisher is in italics... (and not linked).
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I think Goal.com has an article.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 7 vs Ref 41 both FIFA but formatted slightly differently.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 10 AP is linked but ref 13 PA is not?
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 24 seems to mention DW four times, once is probably sufficient.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 26 I think you might have been the person to ask why I had .com after 11v11...
Quite possibly. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 35 link publisher for consistency.
Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 39 pretty sure VOA has an article.
If you say so. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The ext link is the CAF homepage again, not the Africa Cup of Nations site.
I've removed it. CAF evidently aren't interested in keeping home pages for bygone tournaments. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 06:20, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Amakuru just checking you saw these additional remarks...? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:46, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: ah, I did not. Many thanks, will get on to those shortly. — Amakuru (talk) 13:48, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: I have looked at all of them so far. CHeers — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All good here, I'm happy to promote to GA. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:11, 14 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]