Talk:Baker Street and Waterloo Railway/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ---Dough 48 72 17:20, 15 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comments:

Can an infobox be added to the article, as standard with most railroad company articles?
One could be added, but I don't think they are necessary. The reason there isn't one here is that it allows the route map to be larger for legibility than it would be in an infobox. I am following the pattern of City and South London Railway, Great Northern, Piccadilly and Brompton Railway and Charing Cross, Euston and Hampstead Railway, all featured articles.
Citations are not supposed to be in the lead unless that information is unique.
Note 1 is included to explain the term tube railway and note 2 is to confirm the route length. Both are unique to the lead section.
Citation needed for "For the BS&WR and the rest, and others that came later, much of the remainder of the decade saw a struggle to find finance in an uninterested market."
Done. Moved ref 12 to end of paragraph as it covers both issues.
"speculator Whitaker Wright", delink "speculator" to avoid having two touching wikilinks.
Whilst guidance is to avoid adjacent links which might be construed as a single link. I think it is important to have a link to the technical term speculation and I don't think that "speculator Whitaker Wright" would be read as if it was a single link. I have looked at rephrasing this, but the best alternative "...operated by Whitaker Wright, a mining speculator, and chaired..." is not as good.
In the "New Cross & Waterloo Railway bill, 1898" section, combine the short paragraphs together.
I have combined two that are linkable but the others should stay separate as they deal with different matters.
"Gloucester terrace", I think "terrace" should be capitalized here.
It should. Done.
Combine the last paragraph of the "Minor changes, 1902–1904" with the preceding paragraph.
Although the last paragraph is short it deals with a separate matter to the previous one so should be separate.
"the Thames" sounds colliqual, use "River Thames".
Done.
Citations needed for bulleted list of stations.
Done.
Citation needed for "The W&CR was the only tube railway that did not participate in the arrangement as it was owned by the mainline L&SWR."
Done.
The sentence "The new route, ran 890 metres (2,900 ft), in a tight curve from Edgware Road station, initially heading south before turning to the north-west so that the tunnels ended pointing in a more practical direction for a future extension." sounds awkward.
Rephrased.
Combine the sentences "In 1913, the Lord Mayor of London announced a proposal for the Bakerloo Tube to be extended to The Crystal Palace via Camberwell Green, Dulwich and Sydenham Hill. Nothing was done to implement the plan."
Done.
In sentence "In 1914, works were carried out to provide larger ticket halls and install escalators at Oxford Circus, Embankment and Baker Street.", "works were" should be "work was".
OK.
Citation needed for "However, competition from numerous small bus companies during the early 1920s eroded the profitability of the LGOC and had a negative impact on the profitability of the whole UERL group."
Done.
Are any old pictures of the railroad available?
There are loads on the London Transport Museum site but as most of these have been in a private collection until recently, the copyright status is not clear. I have added a link to these. --DavidCane (talk) 23:46, 15 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough 48 72 17:20, 15 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I will pass the article. ---Dough 48 72 16:25, 16 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]