Talk:Cadet Nurse Corps

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Exactly when did it end??? 192.122.237.11 (talk)

Article improvement

In case anyone is watching this page, I’ve begun the process of improving the article with the expectation of some upgrade in class. The Cadet Nurse Corps is within the scope ofWikiProject Medicine. However, the program was not about medicine as such. Sources tell us its primary purpose was to ensure that the United States had enough nurses to care for its citizens on the home and war fronts during World War II. Pendright (talk) 21:32, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

Pre MH assessment read through

Hi Pendright, as discussed, here are a few comments and questions after reading through. Don't feel you need to answer my questions - they are just some bits that may come up in the review.

@JennyOz: Thanks for this. I plan to answer each comment/question on the notion that you would not have brought them up had they not been of some import. BTW, I look forward to the next installment – but please do it in your own good time. Regards! Pendright (talk) 21:11, 11 July 2019 (UTC)

Lede

• "they needed to be accredited" - they were required to be?

<> Needed and required seem to have the same meaning, but required is the better choice.

• the four experiences - it might be necessary to make the 4 x mentions of the four disciplines consistent, ie, same order, same form, same punctuation...

• lede has "four clinical experiences of medical, surgical, obstetrics, and pediatrics" - which is a mix of adjectives and nouns
• Creation section has "medicine, surgery, pediatrics and obstetrics" - this needs comma after pediatrics
• Training has "medical, surgical, obstetrics, and pediatrics" and
• "medicine, surgery, pediatrics, and obstetrics"

<> All read: "medicine, surgery, pediatrics, and obstetrics" - per source.

Background

• "enlarge their instructional or housing facilities." - is "housing" accommodation ie did the cadets live on site at the various nursing schools?

<>Good point, I'm working on it!

<>The answer to your question is yes; students were housed in dormitories on campus. Even though the 1940 survey found that most nursing schools were ill-equipped to enlarge their housing facilities, I failed to address this in the article. Thanks to your comment, I’m planning to add a footnote and a new section on housing. I hope you’ll have time to look and see how they fit.

• "Additional federal aid for the recruitment of nurses became real when" - 'was realised' instead of "became real".

<> See next response!

• "the U.S. Army and Navy called for 2,500 new nurses each month" - Is that 2,500 each service ie 5,000 per month or 2,500 combined?

<> After reading this and the above text several more times, I decided to delete. Without it, the text continues more on point and with a smoother transition to the next paragraph.

• "congress" v Congress - should always take a cap C?

<> Now uppercase

Creation of the program

• "based upon race, color, or creed" - is this actual wording? If so add quotes ie "race, color, or creed"?

<> No!

• "The bill passed both houses of congress by unanimous vote on 15 June 1943 and became Public Law 74 on 1 July 1943" - add name of the act the bill became ie "The Nurse Training Act of 1943 (Bolton Act)"?

<> Added

• "to the U.S. Surgeon General, Thomas Parran, Jr." - has diff wlink punctuation here to that in his wlink in lede

<> Now the same

• "The Victory Nurse Corps and the Student War Nursing Reserve were considered" - do these two names need quote marks?

<> The question: is a proposed name the same as an actual name? Since I don’t know, we’ll leave it as is.

• "This was followed-up" - not sure hyphen necessary

<> Dropped hyphen

• "or in other health agency." - 'another health agency'? or 'other health agencies'?

<> Another

Recruitment

• "By 1945, because of the non-discriminatory provision, over 3,000 African Americans - add with assistance from the National Association of Colored Graduate Nurses? Also, I think non-discriminatory should non-discrimination.

<>This is how I see it. There was only one enabler, and that was the non-decimation provision within the law. It alone opened the door and made it possible. <>Changed to non-decimation

• "technical services to the program" - "technical services" may need brief explanation were they technical marketing services?

Source does not say.

Training

• "included three enrollment periods: the first term was in 1943" - does "term" here mean intake ie does "final term was in 1945" means final intake or the very last study term?

<>Both! It was the last group of cadets accepted into the program and the last 30 month stddy term.

• "the realities of a nursing career" - "realities" may need explaining? Hard work, hours, emotional?

<>Replaced with the word "stress"

• in some places there is "nurse-training programs" but in others the hyphen is missing

<>Because the sources did not seem to use hyphens, I've removed them whereever I found them.

Cadet nurses

• "they were the daughters of farmers and mechanics, of teachers, lawyers, clerks and businessmen" - not sure about this, maybe 'from all walks of life' or 'from varied family backgrounds' or similar?

<>In this case, show seems better than tell

• "with the Indian Service" - pipe wlink to Bureau of Indian Affairs? though that page says in Section Bureau of Indian Affairs (1824–present) that it was only given that name in 1947. Does the source just call it "Indian Service"?

<>Yes

misc bits

• Note 3 pledge - needs quote marks around pledge itself ie so the last sentence of the Note is differentiated

<>Added

• Add link to Commons

<>?

• Add Category:American women in World War II

<>?

• Advisory committee list - no wlinks on unis and orgs intentional?

Yes

That's it for now. I have a few more minor questions that I'll add soon. Just ignore anything not helpful:) JennyOz (talk) 16:24, 11 July 2019 (UTC)

I have added a footnote and a new section on housing to address your question on it. And I’ve responded to all but two of your welcome comments - which I don’t seem to grasp. Thanks again! Pendright (talk) 06:28, 27 July 2019 (UTC)

Capitalization

"British general Montgomery" should have an uncapitalized "general", as "general" is modified by "British". We wouldn't capitalize "American president Nixon" in the context, so we shouldn't capitalize "British general Montgomery". See MOS:JOBTITLES and its example "Mao met with American president Richard Nixon in 1972." —Eyer (If you reply, add {{reply to|Eyer}} to your message to let me know.) 01:19, 29 September 2019 (UTC)