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Language Emergence section

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No information provided as of 9/20/22. Would score 0/3. Matthall.research (talk) 18:51, 20 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Initial graded feedback:
Clear & succinct! Very nice. Current score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 02:21, 19 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Significant Organizations section

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No information provided as on 9/26/22. Would score 0/3. Matthall.research (talk) 18:09, 26 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Initial graded feedback:
Here, too! Exactly how a wiki article should be written. Current score: 3/3. Matthall.research (talk) 02:22, 19 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Human/Civil Rights section

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This is very well-written, and well-cited: nice job! Would score no lower than a 2. To move toward the 3 end of things, I'd like to see more information from the perspective of DHH Danes: are these provisions sufficient to meet their needs? Are the laws actually being implemented in real contexts? Matthall.research (talk) 21:38, 6 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Initial graded feedback:
I'm not seeing any substantive changes since my previous feedback, but my standards have also relaxed a bit since seeing more submissions, so I can give this version a 2.5/3. Matthall.research (talk) 02:27, 19 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review - Erin Bruni

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This looks great so far! It's very well-written, especially in terms of the style of writing that Wikipedia requests. There's a lot of great information here. For your Significant Organizations section, I'm wondering if you can add a little blurb (either for all or for each) pertaining to how much empowerment is given to deaf people. And for each, possibly add a bit more information on what the organization provide for the middle two (if any)? For some extra knowledge/insight, you might be able to find reviews or extra forms of media that might give a better viewpoint on how deaf people at these organization are being treated. Or you might not be able to find them! Overall, it looks great! Tuk82837 (talk) 02:49, 21 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Primary & Secondary Education

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Final graded feedback:

I'm starting to worry that this course wasn't challenging enough for you. You are knocking this out of the park.

Score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 03:50, 6 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Employment

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Final graded feedback:

I continue to be impressed by how much you can communicate with such an economy of words.

Score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 03:51, 6 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Healthcare

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Final graded feedback:

Finally, I have some comments for you (although they're fairly superficial). When you say "hard-of-hearing", readers may infer that that does not include those who are deaf, which I don't think you intend. Also, please avoid the term "hearing impaired" unless it's a direct quote or you have evidence of that being the preferred term used by the people it describes.

Score: 2.75/3 Matthall.research (talk) 03:54, 6 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]