Talk:Donald MacKay (architect)/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 15:34, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 19:08, 9 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 02:56, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:56, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Short review, well written and well sourced. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:56, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

Born in Scotland, he was active in architectural design from 1881 until his death around 1887, MacKay designed a variety of religious, civil, and private constructions across the Washington Territory and British Columbia. The comma after 1887 appears to be the incorrect punctuation mark.
- Oops, fixed. - G
When you refer to styles, i.e. "Gothic Style", I think these need an article before them? Correct me if I'm wrong. The article on Gothic Revival architecture includes these.
- I think so too, good point. - G
becoming his earliest extant work so he had earlier work but it doesn't remain?
- Oh, this is his earliest work in this case. Reworded. -G
After briefly visiting Portland, Oregon why is it notable that he visited Portland?
- Added context here; it's because Rash talks about how he was influenced by architects in Portland. - G
a fire department structure is Fire station sufficient here?
- Oh, yeah. - G
was attempting to bring him "down to the starvation terms offered [...] for my work" What does this mean? To my read it seems like a salary dispute rather than a direction of construction dispute?
- Added context. - G
The article gives sources for where he was living in a few places, these are generally unnecessary unless you think it is contested. i.e. "he was recorded as residing in the hotel in 1882". This doesn't apply so much to the Census where data took a long time to be reported, although this should be noted in a footnote if you think it is relevant. If you believe the reporting at this time is unreliable then please let me know.

Suggestions

Walla Walla; he was contracted to design Saint Patrick's Roman a conjunction would work here better than a semicolon.
Initially working as a contractor beginning in June 1880, MacKay began working as an architect, beginning in -> from to avoid beginning/began
- Implemented. - G

Sources

[1] Y
[2] clock
- Consider linking the internet archive's copy.
  - Done. - G
- It doesn't say his wife was 17 when they married and she could have been 16.
  - Clarified. - G
- Express some more uncertainty on his success in Vancouver given the sources don't reflect the confidence the article presents.
  - Done. - G
[3] Y
[4] Y
[5] Y
I've read through all the sources (which was not too much thankfully), and apart from the comments here, I am happy with how they are reflected in the article.

Other

Images appropriately tagged? Y
NPOV Y
Stable Y
Broad/summary style Y
COPYVIO/OR: 5.7% Earwig (a title) Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:56, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave: Okay, I think that's a wrap! Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 15:25, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thankyou Generalissima for making this very easy! Closing now. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 15:34, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.