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GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 16:52, 12 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take up this review. At a first glance it looks compact and well-built (not the bastion!). I mainly focus on copyediting issues. I'll leave some initial comments hopefully by tomorrow at the latest or within a few hours, I'm not quite sure yet. Thanks! Jaguar 16:52, 12 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    It is well referenced.
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

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Lead

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  • "In 1859, six guns, four 12-pounders and two 12-pound carronades," - just to clarify here as I'm really not sure, does '12-pound' refer to the weight? If it does refer to the weight can a conversion template be used to convert it into kilos as well? I don't know as I could be wrong!
  • The lead complies per WP:LEAD, nothing else wrong here!
Weight yeah but I'm not sure how you'd do a kilo converter and get it to say "pounder". I suppose I could find the kilo equivalent and put it in notes. I'll do that.♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:32, 13 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

History and features

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  • "He speculated that Daniel Specklin may have designed it" - for people not familiar with the subject, it's better if this sentence should open by explaining who Daniel Specklin was (engineer, architect). It already says that he's an architect later in the sentence but it would be better if it was mentioned first?

Flat Bastion Magazine

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  • "Flat Bastion Magazine had been abandoned for years when Freddie Gomez undertook its restoration. Gomez, whose interests include both history and geology," - who was Gomez? It doesn't say what his profession was

On hold

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This article is nearly flawless - it's compact, the prose flows well into each sentence, its broad in its coverage, focused, references are in check... this review even feels like it's too short to tell you the truth but I can't find any more copyediting issues other than those minor ones I had found (and stated above). I'll put this on hold for at least seven days and once those issues have be addressed I'll be very happy to give this article its well deserved GA status! Jaguar 16:18, 13 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

All done I think, thanks for the review! Yeah I've given it a fair old edit and reordering! It's about as comprehensive as it can be on the bastion I'm afraid.♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:41, 13 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Close - promoted

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That was a fast review. As I mentioned above, I really can't find anything at all wrong with this article short of those copyediting issues which have now been swiftly fixed. Thank you for addressing them so quickly! Looks like another Gibraltar GA! Jaguar 18:02, 13 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]