Talk:Iron Gwazi/GA1

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Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 05:46, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I will be conducting a good article review of this article. I aim to get my part of the review done within the next few days. Steelkamp (talk) 05:46, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Good article criteria

Well written

who signed Great Coasters International. Should this be who signed a contract with Great Coasters International.? Steelkamp (talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

for a resort to rival Florida amusement parks – It's not clear to me what Florida amusement parks is? Is this a specific amusement park or in general. Would it make more sense to say for a resort to rival other Florida amusement parks? Steelkamp (talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Any Florida amusement parks, essentially the one's that draw the most tourists in Orlando. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Gwazi opened on June 18, 1999, as Florida's first dueling wooden roller coaster. In 1999, Florida was home to two dueling roller coasters: the Dueling Dragons inverted roller coaster (later known as Dragon Challenge), at Universal Studios' Islands of Adventure and Gwazi; the two roller coasters opened a month apart. This could be simplified to: Gwazi opened on June 18, 1999, as Florida's first dueling wooden roller coaster. It opened one month ahead of another dueling wooden roller coaster: the Dueling Dragons at Universal Studios' Islands of Adventure. Steelkamp (talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Though changed wording. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Is it normal for those RCDB links to be in the infobox and not in the external links at the bottom of the page? Steelkamp (talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, as the Roller Coaster Database is considered a reliable source and database that encompasses statistical info, status, make and model, and general notes. Such information on RCDB is commonly summarized in the infobox. The RCDB is commonly used in WP:APARKS-related articles. Per WP:ELOFFICIAL I limit external links to just the roller coaster's website. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

possible attractions were being conversed to replace it. Should this be possible attractions were being considered to replace it.? Steelkamp (talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Likewise, a park's spokesperson – Should this be Likewise, a park spokesperson? Steelkamp (talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The roller coaster was touted as being the steepest and fastest hybrid roller coaster, as well as the tallest hybrid roller coaster in North America. Should this be The roller coaster was touted as being the steepest, fastest and tallest hybrid roller coaster in North America. Steelkamp (talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Construction on the project site went vertical on August 10, 2019. This strikes me as unencyclopedic language. Seems like something that the news source wrote to get people reading. Should be reworded. Steelkamp (talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Track work went vertical, not structure. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It says it was planned to open in Spring 2021. But then it says that the delay was announced on August 23, 2021. There must have been a delay before that seeing as that date is after spring 2021. Steelkamp (talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It was anticipated but I get the confusion. Spring 2021 was not a hard opening date but a time frame that drew into the summer and then came the second delay. Can be changed or omitted as there was not much reliable source coverage in the months to reflect the delay delay. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The individual wooden tracks reached a length of 3,508 ft or 1,069 m or 7,000 feet (2,100 m) when combined. – Why not just say 7,016 feet, or even leave the combined amount out entirely? Steelkamp (talk) 16:43, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Gwazi was touted for having the first six fly-bys on a dueling roller coaster. This is confusing to be. Change to Gwazi was touted for being the first dueling roller coast with six fly-bys. Steelkamp (talk) 09:45, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Changed. Adog (Talk・Cont) 12:58, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It soon approaches a banked right turn and takes a banked left turn. Could be reworded. Steelkamp (talk) 09:45, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Simplified. Adog (Talk・Cont) 12:58, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Verifiable with no original research

Check using Earwig's copyvio detector turned out clean. Steelkamp (talk) 06:24, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The Youtube references stood out to me, but they seem fine as they are uploaded by verified channels belonging to theme park reviewers. Steelkamp (talk) 06:24, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
...differentiate itself from the Orlando theme park market's use in newer ride technology and rising interest of older-style attractions. This appears to be slightly different from what the source says. The source seems to imply that it was a coincidence. In any case, this could be reworded as it was confusing for me to read. Steelkamp (talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Changed to The idea for building a wooden roller coaster was selected as opposed to steel because of the growing preference in antiquated attractions. The park also used the selection to stand out from other Florida theme parks use in modern ride technology. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

park officials hinted that there were future construction plans involving Gwazi slated for 2020. I'm not sure it's correct to say they "hinted" when it seems that they outright stated that there would be construction. Steelkamp (talk) 16:43, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Changed. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

In 2006, a 52-year-old Palm Springs, Florida, resident... I think that should be Palm Harbor, Florida. Steelkamp (talk) 09:45, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

You most certainly are right. Adog (Talk・Cont) 12:58, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Broad in its coverage

Is it known when the original rollercoaster was demolished? Steelkamp (talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

This might be confusing to those not familiar with Rocky Mountain Construction roller coaster transformations. In Gwazi's case, the two original wooden roller coaster structures were not fully demolished but were incorporated into the singular steel roller coaster. This means that the wooden support structures were not completely dismantled for both original roller coasters, only partially. Partial demolition and construction simultaneously started in late 2018 per the Tampa Bay Bussiness Journal. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:34, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Neutral

Stable

Yes. Steelkamp (talk) 06:24, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Illustrated, if possible

I don't think that File:Irongwazisignofficial.jpg can be used. It prominently features a logo which would be under copyright, and it is not de minimis. Logo could be uploaded to Wikipedia under fair use instead. Alternatively, a photo of the actual roller coast could be used for the infobox. Steelkamp (talk) 06:24, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Licensing on the other images is fine. Spacing is fine. Captions are fine. Steelkamp (talk) 06:24, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
This isn't required under the GA criteria, but the images should have alt text. Also, specifying the number of pixels isn't preferred. Rather, you should use the upright parameter if you don't want the default image size. Steelkamp (talk) 06:24, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed these items (also thank you for taking on this review, pass or fail, this is my most anticipated and lengthy article to date). :) Adog (Talk・Cont) 13:19, 1 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General

@Steelkamp: I wanted to check-in and see how you are doing since it has been about a week. No rush! :) Adog (Talk・Cont) 03:36, 8 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get this done by this Friday. Steelkamp (talk) 05:32, 8 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

All good, take your time. Adog (Talk・Cont) 14:31, 8 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll finish the rest tomorrow, then place it on hold. Steelkamp (talk) 16:44, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I will get into fixing in the meantime! Adog (Talk・Cont) 17:45, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'm done, placing this on hold. Steelkamp (talk) 09:45, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Alrighty, I should have made all the corrections listed or addressed comments to clarify. Anything else? Adog (Talk・Cont) 12:59, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Nope, that's it. Good job Steelkamp (talk) 17:36, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I appreciate your time and patience! :) Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:21, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]