Talk:Jacques Gershkovitch/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 21:29, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello! This is currently third on my "to review" list, which means that I should be able to review in a few days. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 21:29, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you much. I look forward to addressing your concerns whenever you are ready. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 22:05, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Comments

• In the infobox, I would list his wife as "Lucia Gershkovitch"
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 17:31, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
• Do we have a birthdate and death date?
  • Both unknown based on my research. Maybe if I take the article to featured status I can visit the library and search the archives for obituaries. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 17:31, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
• If you could trim the lead a little bit, I think that it would be good as it is a little too long in comparison with the length of the article, in my opinion.
  • Reduced a bit, and converted 3 paragraphs to 2. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 17:35, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
• I know we don't want to make the image so small that it's difficult to see, but could you reduce it a little bit? It's quite pixelated.
  • I agree, the image is bad, but it is better than none and I think it is preferred to leave the image width parameter alone because people have different browser/viewing settings. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 17:37, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
• Could you split "early life and education" and "Relocation" into two paragraphs?
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 17:40, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
• Who said the "who made up in enthusiasm what he lacked in skill" quote?
  • I assume Jacob Avshalomov, the author of the book listed in the inline citation, unless he was quoting someone else. I no longer have access to the book. Do I need to adjust the wording somehow, or can readers see the author of the book or even find it if they need more info? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 17:42, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
• I would change the sentence "However, before 1917 the two had never met." to read "The two met in 1917, and..."
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:10, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• "There he organized" this is a bit of a confusing construction, as the previous sentence talked about his marriage. Also, where's the "there"?
  • Better? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:10, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• I would split or rephrase the sentence beginning "During a service rehearsal..."
  • Better? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• The next few sentences, which directly apply to the sentence I just mentioned, might need rephrasing as well.
  • Better? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• I would shorten the title of the next section to simply "relocation"
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• "the Orient" is a bit of an outdated term
  • You know, I thought the same thing, but I went with what the sources said. I will change to Asia. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• First sentence of "Portland Youth Philharmonic": remove "conductor"
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• There's actually only two complete movements of the Unfinished Symphony, so you don't really have to say that they performed "two movements" of it.
  • Ok. Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• Be more specific than "legend says"
  • Better? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• I would spell out "kill" correctly
  • Hmm, there must be a way to show sic or intentional misspelling due to a heavy accent. I think this statement is supposed to be more about his persona and not read as though he was actually threatening to kill a student. I think correcting the spelling changes the tone of the sentence. Any other ideas? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:20, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
  • I went ahead and added the "sic" template. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:28, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
• Two external links: (this and this) are dead.
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:24, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

@Another Believer: Thank you for this work on this article. I've spent many hours in youth orchestra rehearsals, so I was pleasantly surprised to see this article at GAN. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 22:25, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks so much! Glad to hear! ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:24, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Wonderful. Pass. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 02:07, 17 March 2016 (UTC)

Final assessment

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

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