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Jon Burge GA Review

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Ok issues that have been raised before are still apparent, but I will put the article on hold to see if they can't be cleared up: -

This article will be watched for seven days and if no signs of improvement are seen maybe failed. Good luckMillion_Moments (talk) 15:27, 28 July 2008 (UTC)![reply]

I am having problems with these sentances: "After all of the police excesses, mere coincidence enabled the capture of the suspects. The police had been led to a co-conspirator of theirs in an earlier burglary." Does this mean that they arrested a man in a burglary, who gave up Wilson? Because I don't feel it's very clear. Possibly it's the use of the word "theirs", almost implies it maybe a co-conspiritor of the police. Million_Moments (talk) 19:46, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'm pretty much fine with everything but this, so if it's sorted I should be able to pass this. Million_Moments (talk) 19:57, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I have cleaned up the sentences at issue.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 21:25, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

{copied from Talk:Jon Burge) This article has now passed the good article nomination process. Congratulations! The article is very detailed and broad in converage. Areas for furture improvement could include the tone of the article, which in some places is written more like an article for entertainment (say from a book or a newspaper) than for an encyclopeadia. Million_Moments (talk) 14:50, 7 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]