Talk:Kevan Thakrar/GA1
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Nominator: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 21:14, 7 September 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 22:07, 25 October 2024 (UTC)
This one's pretty grim but short enough to finish before I go to sleep!
Prose
[edit]Lead
[edit]after his brother Miran murdered three men: I think it should be clearer that Kevan was with Miran when he murdered.
Murders
[edit]which had been -> "he had"
Link "submachine gun"
found guilty of helping him to escape: Is there a specific charge this can be linked to?
Link "Southwark Crown Court"
I think link "life imprisonment" so a reader can read further into the seeming contradiction between "life" and "35 years"
Prison
[edit]Shouldn't "CSCs" just be "CSC" in this instance?
he denied: Is "appealed" a better word here?
Perhaps link "Durham" and "Milton Keynes"
Thakrar was held in Close Supervision Centres: Abbreviate to "CSCs" for consistency
Link "Incarcerated Workers Organising Committee"
his judicial review of being in the CSC for 749 consecutive days was heard: I assume this had an outcome?
Sources
[edit]Health/formatting
[edit]Reliability
[edit]One journal, and all the rest reliable news sources.
Spot check
[edit][1, 2a]:
[6, 7a]:
[15]:
[16]:
Scope
[edit]Appears that no important information is omitted
Copyvio
[edit]13.0% on Earwig, no too close paraphrases detected.
Stable
[edit]Media
[edit]None, unfortunately.