Talk:Kevan Thakrar/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 21:14, 7 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 22:07, 25 October 2024 (UTC)

This one's pretty grim but short enough to finish before I go to sleep!

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Lead

after his brother Miran murdered three men: I think it should be clearer that Kevan was with Miran when he murdered.

Murders

which had been -> "he had"

Link "submachine gun"

found guilty of helping him to escape: Is there a specific charge this can be linked to?

Link "Southwark Crown Court"

I think link "life imprisonment" so a reader can read further into the seeming contradiction between "life" and "35 years"

Prison

Shouldn't "CSCs" just be "CSC" in this instance?

he denied: Is "appealed" a better word here?

Perhaps link "Durham" and "Milton Keynes"

Thakrar was held in Close Supervision Centres: Abbreviate to "CSCs" for consistency

Link "Incarcerated Workers Organising Committee"

his judicial review of being in the CSC for 749 consecutive days was heard: I assume this had an outcome?

Sources Y

Reliability Y

One journal, and all the rest reliable news sources.

Spot check Y

[1, 2a]: Y

[6, 7a]: Y

[15]: Y

[16]: Y

Scope Y

Appears that no important information is omitted

Copyvio Y

13.0% on Earwig, no too close paraphrases detected.

Media Y

None, unfortunately.