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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 15:12, 28 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]


I'll do the review. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 15:12, 28 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Pretty good so far. Here's what I'd suggest:

  • The lead seems a little long and overly detailed given the article's length.
  • It says he survived an attack by a single rancher in the lead, but the body says "gunmen" plural, with no mention of them being ranchers.
  • Could you name some specific indigenous rights groups that support the demand of him being buried where he lived?
  • No images. I know public domain images are scarce for topics like this, but if you can, finding something at least vaguely related to the topic is generally better than nothing.

That's all I found, and if you would rather leave one of the bullets alone, just tell me. Otherwise, it meets all six criteria. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 15:23, 28 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review and the good suggestions, An anonymous username, not my real name. Responding to your points:
  • I've trimmed the lead down
  • It should be ranchers/gunmen plural according to the sources, fixed
  • The source only says "indigenous rights groups", which makes me think it could well just be referring back to dos Santos. I don't think this sentence really adds anything so I've just removed it.
  • We obviously won't get a free image, but I've tried with one of the few grainy-cam photos of him under fair use. I also added a map.
Do let me know if there's anything else! – Joe (talk) 10:15, 3 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Beautiful work. It looks perfect. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 10:55, 3 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]