Talk:Marie Kingué/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Averageuntitleduser (talk · contribs) 23:27, 30 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 10:32, 2 July 2024 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 10:32, 2 July 2024 (UTC)

@Averageuntitleduser Here's a short review from me! Everything looks great besides these things that have to be addressed. Arconning (talk) 14:52, 2 July 2024 (UTC)

@Arconning: thanks for the promptness! I've adressed your comments and included a few replies. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 18:09, 2 July 2024 (UTC)

Prose and MoS

• Add a hyphen in mentions of Cap Français.

Lead

• No issues, but if possible make it two paragraphs.

Biography

• I suggest removing this heading and making the subheadings main headings.

Early life and enslavement

• The researcher Crystal Nicole Eddins, Eddins and the historian Karol K. Weaver, remove the.
  • I tend to stray away from false titles, no hate towards them though.

Healing and divination

• performed witchcraft on the talismans, add a comma at the end.
• "she has acquired a renown that extends across the entire North Province", , remove comma.

Detractors and arrest

• The two branded her a hussy and a charlatan, add a comma at the end.
• He thought her superstitions were absurd and had victimized both black and white people., replace had with that she.
  • Rephrased in line with this suggestion.

Images

• Images aren't a requirement but I suggest adding some photos that are relevant to the article to make it more appealing.
  • Couldn't find much in terms of relevant locations but I figure Neufchâteau is worth including; we only know about her because of his documents.

Ref

• References are great! Never seen an article made up of entirely of books before.
• For the bibliography section, I encourage using "refbegin" and "refend" templates.
  • Ooh, that's nifty!
• Earwig's okay!

Misc

• No ongoing edit war, broad and focused information about the topic.

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Comments from Jaguarnik

The article was very interesting; I'm glad to have read it. I have a few comments:

• An explanation of what a kaperlata is, either as a footnote or in parenthesis, would be good, because the term is likely unfamiliar to the average reader.
  • Good idea!

A few nitpicks:

• "fans" seems odd here, maybe "devotees" or "followers" would be better? Your call.
• "on the plantation of...an unnamed girl" girl also feels a bit odd here, was she a child? "Woman" would fit better here in my opinion.

Jaguarnik (talk) 16:39, 2 July 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for the second perspective! I've adressed your comments as well. Averageuntitleduser (talk) 18:09, 2 July 2024 (UTC)