Talk:Michael F. Adams/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 01:04, 27 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 23:16, 24 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.
a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

Lead

He began his career as a staffer for Senate minority leader Howard Baker, including as Baker's chief of staff: "later becoming" is more specific that "including"

from the accounting firm Deloitte & Touche: Unnecessary detail for the lead

His disagreement with, and subsequent refusal to extend the contract of, longtime athletic director Vince Dooley was unpopular among many: The comma after "of" is unnecessary and breaks the flow of the sentence.

Early life and education

Afterwards, he earned a Master of Arts in communication research methodologies and a Doctorate in communications: "Afterwards" should be "afterward" in American English.

Political work and Pepperdine, 1974–1988

Adams was the Republican nominee for Congress in Tennessee's 5th congressional district but lost the general election to the incumbent Democratic representative Bill Boner: Could do with a comma to separate the clauses, between "district" and "but".

Adams left Alexander's staff to accept a position as the vice president for university affairs at Pepperdine University. He was also a member of the Pepperdine faculty as a professor of political communication.: It's unclear if he held this position before leaving Alexander's staff, or whether he acquired this position at the same time as becoming vice president of affairs.

Centre College, 1988–1997

Old Centre, the Carnegie Library, Horky House, and Combs Warehouse, underwent renovation and improvement during his tenure: Carnegie Library (Danville, Kentucky) can be wikilinked, "renovation and improvement" can be simplified to "renovation" for conciseness, and the comma after Combs Warehouse is unneeded.

Greek Row was established, with fraternities receiving newly built houses in 1995 and sororities receiving separate chapter houses for the first time since appearing on campus for the first time in 1980 the year prior: Not sure what's going on here!

The former fraternity houses were converted into new dormitory buildings, named for Centre alumni and important figures: It is unclear whether they were just named after them, or built for them to inhabit. If they were just named after them, "named after" is much more common terminology than "named for".

Centre had received multiple large research initiative grants from the Howard Hughes Medical Institute and the National Science Foundation: "Centre had received" can be "Center received". "Had received" would be used to emphasize that an action occurred before another past event.

and outraised a $60 million goal as part of their Front and Centre fundraising campaign: Front and Center should be in quotes.

The John C. Young Honors Program, named in honor of Centre's fourth president John C. Young, which provided a group of seniors with support in a research project, was established in 1989: I assume this program was established for the primary purpose of a supporting the research project, rather than it just being one of the several purposes. If that is the case and the source supports it, reorganising the sentence to something like "The John C. Young Honors Program, named in honor of Centre's fourth president John C. Young was established in 1989, to provide support for a group of seniors in a research project" makes this clearer. Also, is there any detail on what this research project is?

Adams attracted some disdain from the faculty at Centre while there: after he made what were described by faculty members as unilateral changes to the faculty handbook, a move that violated college policy, a selection of faculty began what Rich Whitt described as a "quiet revolt":

"while there" can be removed for conciseness.
The colon is improperly used here has it does not introduce a list, explanation or quote. I think it should be replaced with a comma.
The source does not say that faculty members described them as unilateral changes. It was probably the source itself that summerised the changes as unilateral.
Attributing to "Rich Whitt" is meaningless if there is no context on who he is.

These included stints as a vice chair on the National Collegiate Athletic Association Presidents Commission, the Board of the National Association of Independent Colleges and Universities, the Board of the American Council on Education, the Board of the Kentucky Center for Public Issues, Leadership Kentucky, the Executive Council of the Southern Association of Colleges and Schools: The last list item needs an "and" before it.

He helped to reorganize, and was the first president of, the Southern Collegiate Athletic Conference, of which Centre was a member.: The second comma breaks up the sentence flow unnecessarily.

University of Georgia, 1997–2013

Ultimately, he was selected, and he was announced as UGA's incoming president on June 11, 1997,[3] an announcement that surprised many UGA faculty: "an announcement that" can be replaced with "which".

large flagship universities: "large" can be removed for conciseness.

and took office as UGA's twenty-first president: "21st" is used earlier. Pick a format to remain consistent.

Shortly into his stint at Georgia: Tenure is a better word than "stint", since it relates to educational employment. "Stint" is used a couple times.

2003–04: "2001-2002" is used earlier. Pick a format to remain consistent throughout the article.

Franklin College of Arts and Sciences can be wikilinked

raised more money than it had in its history to that point I think "up to that point" would make this a bit clearer.

Athens can be wikilinked

"Regent's professor" should be Regents' professor and linked to distinguished professor?

Post-presidency, 2013–present, Personal life

Do any sources explicitly state he has retired?

Sources

[1]: Seems to be down

[2]: Good

[3]: Good

[4]: Good

[5]: Good

[7]: Good

[8]: Good

[14]: Discussed in comments

[15]: Good

[17]: Supported by page 33, not 34

[18]: Good

[19]: Good

[20]: The source says Patterson confirmed that Adams was a finalist, also it does not support that Adams was offered a raise.

[21]: The source does not say they audited especially those for travel, and payments to his wife. Those problematic expenses were discovered during the audit.

[24] and [25] need to be swapped, some of the information before reference [24] is supported by [25].

[26]: Good

[27]: The 92.1 figure was projected. The text does not state this.

[28]: Source says "about 35,000", text says "nearly 35,000".

Images

Licensing looks good, pictures are appropriate and well captioned. I think there should be a picture of the University of Georgia though, perhaps of one of the five colleges he founded?