Talk:MissingNo./GA1
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Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch Infobox: Should contain type (Normal/Bird) and Pokedex number (which is 000).
Picture- consider adding this: File:Missingno.png to the article.
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Lead: The first line should establish notability, so it should mention that MissingNo. is a glitch.
All quotes must be sourced, even if they're in the lead. So the citation: "programming quirk" must be sourced.
The following line: However, due to the manner by which two in-game events were programmed, players could encounter the MissingNo. Pokémon in two areas via a glitch by triggering the events one after the other. is not clear, the "however" is out of place, the line is overly detailed, it should be removed.
The line First documented by Nintendo in the May 1999 issue of Nintendo Power, is redundant as the same line is mentioned in the History section. Start the second paragraph with Encountering MissingNo.
Generally lines like: one of the most famous glitches in video gaming by sources such as IGN must be sourced, but since it's explained later on in the article, it's probably safe to leave it unsourced in the lead.
The following line is not sourced in the article, however. You'll have to source it in the lead: fans of the game series have attempted to rationalize MissingNo. as a full Pokémon within the game's world
As for this sentence: an aspect of interest to sociologists discussing the impact of games upon society do you have sources indicating more than 1 sociologist has discussed this topic? If not, you can't use sociologists. Try using sociology instead.
History: The line These abilities allow players to interact differently within the game's world as well, such as using "Fly" to travel instantly between two areas. is redundant and should be removed.
The line ... events necessary to cause the glitch to appear ... is incorrect. The lead says MissingNo. is a Pokemon. While it may be both, you cannot use the terms interchangeably.
In the line ...travel up and down it would eventually... the "it" is redundant and should be removed.
Characteristics: In the sentence: Between each area, the game... specify what you mean by "each area".
The first paragraph needs more clarity. Event is not a correct term for two processes that must take place. And, as such, the line The second event is caused by the Old Man's demonstration is incorrect, as the second event IS the Old Man's demonstration.
Please clarify the second sentence. Between each area, the game assigns values for Pokémon that the player encounters to a data buffer, read by the game when they encounter a wild Pokémon. Is the value assigned after encountering the Pokemon?
In the sentence: ... the hexadecial values assigned ..., hexadecial should be replaced by hexadecimal.
Source: Once encountered, players can fight, flee, or capture MissingNo. like any other wild Pokémon in the game.
In this line: Regardless of the outcome, after encountering the Pokémon, the sixth item in the player's item menu will be increased from its current value to 128 source 6 says 128 copies are made, source 12 says infinite copies are made. Which one is true?
As for this line: and the game's "Hall of Fame" gallery will become permanently glitched. Other graphical glitches may also occur, though are temporary and will be removed by viewing another Pokémon’s statistic screen or resetting the Game Boy. Source 1 confirms several of the facts, however source 8 does not adequately source the facts mentioned.
"Numberical" should be "numerical".
"Able to be used" should be shortened to "usable". Pokemon Trainers should be Pokemon trainers, I think (though I might be wrong here).
Source these sentences: If captured, MissingNo. will be treated as a fully functional Pokémon for the player to use, appearing in the game's numerical index listing as number "000" and able to be used against wild Pokémon or other Pokémon Trainers. Each MissingNo. have consistent abilities, type (listed as "Normal/Bird"), statistics, and sounds. They shouldn't be original research.
"...will be increased from its current value" not it's.
Each MissingNo. has consistent abilities, not have.
Expand the line "Used in certain in-game areas and events".
Reaction and reception: "The glitch has had significant impact" should be sourced, else it's OR.
"Despite Nintendo's warnings, due to MissingNo.'s positive effect" might not be correct, as MissingNo. has negative effects too. You might want to write: "perceived positive effect".
"gaming communities revolving around Pokémon have attempted" Why is Pokemon italicized?
"More deeply" is incorrect English. Try using the phrase "in depth" instead.
"Noting players tendency to ... assessing and critiquing" is incorrect tense. Should be "assess and critique".
"extent by which" should be "extent to which".
"popularity is a unique" should be "an unique".
See also: What is the relevance of Gameplay of Pokemon to the article?
References: Source 8 might not constitute a reliable source according to WP:RS, as it's a blog. You may want to remove sentences from source 8, and replace it with source 1.
Pending improvements to the article, I'm placing this On Hold.
Minor comment The sentence MissingNo.'s appearance in Pokémon Red and Blue has been noted as one of the most famous glitches in video gaming by sources such as IGN, and fans of the game series have attempted to rationalize MissingNo. as a full Pokémon within the game's world, an aspect of interest to sociology discussing the impact of games upon society. is long and awkward and needs to be revised. Artichoker[talk] 16:23, 15 June 2009 (UTC)
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Now that I'm satisfied that MissingNo. satisfies the Good Article criteria, I'm promoting it to a GA. Congratulations! And if you wish to review one yourself, GAN is that way. Aditya α ß 08:00, 16 June 2009 (UTC)