Talk:Personal (Men of Vizion album)/GA1
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 06:28, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
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[edit]- Lead
- "with some noting similarities" with some isa bit too vague, I guess that it's the wording, tweak it a bit.
- Release
- "Originally set to be released on May 14, 1996, Personal was released" redundancy of "released"
- I see that "weeks" is used repetitively, try to switch some of the to "issue". Example: "to re-enter at the same position for the week ending on July 20." --> "to re-enter at the same position on the chart issued on July 20."
- "being moving back"?
- "exited" is used too much.
- "tying in with the song's lyric play on reversed gender roles" what does this exactly mean?
- Critical
- Try to avoid farmquotting
- Tracklisting
- Why not using the template? (it is not mandatory ofc)
- Personnel and Credits and personnel
- Why two different sections?
- References
- All good here.
— ΛΧΣ21 06:37, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
- I believe I've fixed all the issues brought forth. As for the track listing, I don't own the album, and I couldn't find scans online for the credits, so I just left it as is. I will, however, put it into the template later. — Statυs (talk, contribs) 06:57, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
- Fair enough. Passing. — ΛΧΣ21 07:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)