Talk:Pyramid of Nyuserre/GA1

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 14:37, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:37, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I've added the page to my watchlist. Take your time. Cheers, Mr rnddude (talk) 23:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y (5.7% is highest, incidental parallels.)
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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5.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links N in ...and believes that in the case of Nyuserre both forms of cultic worship survived the transition from the Old Kingdom, throughout First Intermediate Period, and into the early Middle Kingdom. the Middle Kingdom is a DAB link.
No Dead links Y
Images appropriately licensed Y

Prose Suggestions

Lead

It is noted for its unusual location and many architectural deviations from contemporary designs. suggest It is noted for its unusual location and its many deviations from contemporary architectural designs.

Done Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Nyuserre first had to complete the unfinished monuments of his father, suggest Nyuserre first completed the unfinished monuments of his father,

Done Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Third, there is an unexplained square platform in the temple which signals to archaeologists that there may be an obelisk pyramidion nearby as well. suggest Third, there is an unexplained square platform in the temple which has led archaeologists to suggest that there may be an obelisk pyramidion nearby to it.

Done Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Nyuserre's cult may have survived the transition from the Old Kingdom to Middle Kingdom. Though this remains a contentious issue among Egyptologists. suggest Nyuserre's cult may have survived the transition from the Old Kingdom to Middle Kingdom, though this remains a contentious issue among Egyptologists.

Done Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Location and excavation

Abusir assumed great import suggest Abusir gained great importance

I'll leave this one as is. Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

was entombed as the second member of the necropolis. suggest became the second to be entombed in the necropolis.

Done Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Later history

Nyuserre was the last king to build his funerary monument at Abusir; his successors Menkauhor, Djedkare Isesi and Unas abandoned the site in favour of sites elsewhere.[28][76][77] Abusir thus ceased to be the royal necropolis. suggest Nyuserre was the last king to build his funerary monument at Abusir. His successors Menkauhor, Djedkare Isesi and Unas abandoned the site in favour of sites elsewhere, and Abusir thus ceased to be used as a royal necropolis.

Done Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

East of the mortuary temple, German Egyptologists unearthed thirty-one Greek burials between 1901 and 1904. These burials have been dated c. 375–350 BCE. suggest East of the mortuary temple, German Egyptologists unearthed thirty-one Greek burials dated between c. 375–350 BCE, from 1901 to 1904.

Done Mr rnddude (talk) 00:02, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Mr rnddude: That is all my comments, passing now. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:44, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Additional comments by Lingzhi

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Cheers Lingzhi. I had Ucucha alread, but I've added the other scripts and will take a look at the result. Mr rnddude (talk) 04:07, 16 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]