Talk:Shah Budak/GA1

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Nominator: Aintabli (talk · contribs) 02:39, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 14:57, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

You link Turkmen to Oghuz Turks here but to Turkoman (ethnonym) at Malik Arslan. Which is correct?
Answered in the other review.
succession - would accession be a better word?
Done
Shah Suwar crushed his brother near Zamantu Castle - he didn't crush his brother. His forces defeated those of his brother. Per WP:SLANG, we should present this in a more encyclopedic tone.
Zamantu Castle - Per Wikipedia:LEASTASTONISHMENT, Zamantu might be better unlinked; one would expect the article to be one on the castle.
Removed.
Shah Budak blinded Shahruh in retribution for the treatment his son Feyyaz had received in 1484. - No indication what this treatment was.
Changed to "defeated" and "overpowered".
worsting - ?
Ouster? Aintabli (talk) 00:02, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Generally, foreign language terms that have not been adapted to English should be italicized (see MOS:NON-ENG)
Done Aintabli (talk) 00:06, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Added custom map with a few labels for some of the towns mentioned in the text. Aintabli (talk) 00:06, 1 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Looks pretty good. I've made some edits; please review them. Only a few nitpicks to resolve. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 15:02, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]