Talk:Silver Hill Mine/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Ixtal (talk · contribs) 02:02, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful. I usually review section by section for grammar and source issues as I read, then provide general comments on the whole article. Please use {{done}} to indicate when feedback has been addressed. I encourage you to debate if you find any feedback you disagree with. If I do not answer within 48 hours, please {{ping}} me. I am quite a forgetful editor and it is likely I forgot to get back to you. — ♠Ixtal ( T / C ) ⁂ Non nobis solum. ♠ 02:02, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
Comments
[edit]Lead+Infobox
[edit]- Infobox image: I would consider editing the Commons image to a cropped version without the margins so that the image is more readable. It would also make it easier to read the names of the various shafts mentioned in the Company section.
- Fixed. - G
Background
[edit]- I would consider moving the table to below the first paragraph so there's no big white space as there is now due to the infobox length.
- Fixed. - G
- The Davidson County, North Carolina wl might best be displayed as just Davidson County, as there is no other davidson county in the Carolinas and the Carolinas are already mentioned in the same sentence.
- Fixed. - G
Roughly 200 feet
- Perhaps here I'd write "While roughly 200 feet [...]" or something along those lines to ease the sentence into all the numbers. Nothing wrong with the sentence itself I just had to read it twice over to understand it so a word like "while" to introduce the first sentence in the compound could help readers
understand.
- Fixed. - G
- Same comment about Cabarrus County as above
- Also fixed. - G
Washington Mining Company
[edit]each able to smelt a ton of lead
- I would say "one" instead of "a" to make it clear you are referring to the measurement rather than the expression "a ton of" meaning "a lot".- Fixed. - G
- In the Philadelphia shipping paragraph you say "lead pigs" and "pig lead" -- is there a difference between the two terms or do they refer to the same thing?
- Pig lead is the lead that comprises lead pigs. I just dropped the pig from "pig lead" since its not a needed clarification. - G
Lead was shipped for processing at Philadelphia.
This sentence feels redundant.- Dropped it. -G
Zinc and Silver Mining Company
[edit]have continued the Fall of Petersburg
- Continued until?- Fixed. - G
Copyright Violations
[edit]- Copyvios Detector detects no likely copyright violations.
- Ah, let me add some in. - G
General thoughts
[edit]Honestly this is a great article. Only very minor things to address. I'll go over the sources now but expect no surprises there. Is there a reason why some of the images in the Kaas source, for example, can't be added to the article as well?
- Added another image from Kaas, good point. - G