Talk:Wave 1/GA1
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 01:58, 1 June 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
[edit]- Please provide an appropriate alternative description for the album cover images
- Remove the "single 2" parameter as it is currently unused and given the release date of the album, very unlikely to ever been used
- Don't know why that was there, removed editorEهեইдအ😎 02:36, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- Add the release year for the album Galactic Melt please
- The last sentence is way too long; it can easily be broken apart into (at least) two more convincing statements
Background and composition
[edit]Paragraph 1
[edit]- "tweet"? You could instead add "on Twitter" to the end of the sentence, or you can find a place to snugly fit it into
- Clarified editorEهեইдအ😎 02:36, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
- You could state where that long quote comes from; you could also paraphrase it or summarize it as it is quite long
Paragraph 2
[edit]- Again, add the release year for the album Galactic Melt please
- It's there, read the first sentence again: "Maintaining the bright and danceable feel from Com Truise's 2011 debut studio album Galactic Melt"
- Rest looks great! :)
Tracks
[edit]- I think a better title for this section would be "Composition" or "Songs"; but I guess this is just personal preference
Paragraph 1
[edit]- "by a critic" please elaborate
- Nothing else to add
Paragraph 2
[edit]- No source for the first sentence/statement which uses quotes; please add a reliable one
- Rest looks good as well!
Promotion and release
[edit]- Nada :)
Critical reception
[edit]Paragraph 1
[edit]- Reword first sentence to "Wave 1 received positive reviews from music critics, with the EP..."
- State what Metacritic's score means; elaborate further
- "Pitchfork Media's Paul Thompson noted that the producer's attention to perfecting every detail instead of inventing new ideas on Wave 1 caused the album to lack any sort of feeling, but he concluded that "by burrowing down into a few key sounds rather than stiffly approximating a dozen-plus, the intermittently funky, unshakably finicky Wave 1 is a mostly welcome return."[6]" --> I'm not exactly sure what the middle of the sentence is trying to convey; could you reword this as well? It's rather as long as well; you could likely get the same message across without including the entirety of the quote
Paragraph 2
[edit]- These reviews include quotes that are also quite long
- Paraphrased and sometimes shorten editorEهեইдအ😎 02:36, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
Tracklist
[edit]- I think you should retitle this section as "Track listing"
- Add a source after "All songs written and composed by Seth Haley."
Charts
[edit]- Looks good
Other notes
[edit]- You need to add a "Release history" section giving the release date, format, and record label distributing the album
- You also need to include a "Credits and personnel" section which includes people involved in the making of the record
- I'll be happy to do this, but there are no credits that list anybody else but "Artwork by Com Truise" on the album notes. Its quite obvious he wrote and produced the entire album, so in this case, the section would probably be pointless. But that's just my own preference and not Wikipedia's rule. editorEهեইдအ😎 02:36, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
End of GA Review:
[edit]A good article with some minor issues that have been explained above. I will place the article on hold for seven days to allow for changes. Please alert me when the issues are taken care of; thanks a lot! Carbrera (talk) 02:10, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
- Great work @EditorE:! Definitely will be passing now. Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 16:57, 4 June 2016 (UTC)