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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:50, 5 August 2017 (UTC)

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Nana Kofi Twumasi-Ankrah

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Created by Crosstemplejay (talk). Self-nominated at 14:25, 12 July 2017 (UTC).

  • @Jupitus Smart: this is called close paraphrasing and must be rewritten in the writer's own words:
  • Source: The Queen's appointment was received with some cynicism by some social media users, who said the move is years late.
  • Article: His appointment was received with some cynicism by some social media users, who believed such an appointment was years late.
  • Source: when a Canadian captain made history by becoming the first female infantry officer to lead the Changing of the Guard ceremony at Buckingham Palace in London.
  • Article: when a Canadian captain made history by becoming the first female infantry officer to lead the Changing of the Guard ceremony at Buckingham Palace in London.
  • Source: The role of Mounting The Queen's Guard usually falls to the British Army’s Household Division, which is part of the male-dominated infantry division.
  • Article: The role of Mounting The Queen's Guard usually falls to the British Army’s Household Division, a predominantly male-dominated infantry division.
  • Yoninah (talk) 23:50, 15 July 2017 (UTC)
Thanks for the heads up @Yoninah:. I was not sure if a Copyvio unlikely was enough to hold this up. Over to you now to improve this @Crosstemplejay:. Jupitus Smart 04:24, 16 July 2017 (UTC)
  • Thank you for your fixes. I did more copyediting on the article, removing some close paraphrasing that didn't turn up in Earwigs Copyvio Detector, and also removed text that was unrelated to the subject. I think the hook could be punchier, like:
  • ALT1: ... that Ghanaian-born Major Nana Kofi Twumasi-Ankrah is the first black equerry in British monarch history? Yoninah (talk) 21:21, 18 July 2017 (UTC)
  • Sourcing needs improvement, particularly since this is a BLP. Nikkimaria (talk) 12:07, 25 July 2017 (UTC)
@Nikkimaria: Sourcing improvement done. Thanks and God bless.CrossTemple Jay 16:57, 26 July 2017 (UTC)
Better, but see this discussion. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:46, 27 July 2017 (UTC)
@Nikkimaria: The link was very helpful, thanks. I want to paste it here of other editors too.
The Mail is probably the bottom of the barrel, but the Express, Mirror, and Sun aren't far off. If we see a cite to any of them, it is generally a good idea to replace it to a cite to more reliable source. If no such source exists, and if a given statement is only seen there, then editors should carefully consider whether to remove the text at issue entirely, because coverage only by low-quality tabloids that's a pretty strong signal that something is not encyclopedic, would be given undue weight, etc. But of course a lot of this is based on context / case-by-case. Neutralitytalk 5:32 pm, 10 April 2017, Monday (3 months, 17 days ago) (UTC+1)
@Nikkimaria: Please go through the article again. I have made the necessary ref replacements. Thanks.CrossTemple Jay 16:15, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
Restoring original tick. Nikkimaria (talk) 22:00, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
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