User:Lmc99/Moonlight Basin/Jeffdnguyen921 Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Lmc99
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Lmc99/sandbox/Moonlight Basin Current
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Moonlight Basin
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit](Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
Lead
[edit]Great job on the lead shrinking it down and only providing necessary information. I really like how short and how concise it is, it leads well into the rest of the article. One suggestion for the lead would be to introduce some of the next sections you will be talking about.
Content
[edit]The content added really did highlight relevant information and helped organize everything very uniquely and made it much more readible relative to the original draft. I am not familiar with the topic itself but I think having information revolving geography would be interesting.
Tone
[edit]Everything was very content neutral and helped present the facts in a very accordingly. Overall I think you do a great job at telling the history without much bias.
Sources and References
[edit]In terms of the references, many of the articles came from news articles and those are good for this project. Overall, the references are well chosen and I feel have merits in the article as a whole. Overall the additional information sources help add more information to the given article. Obviously some sources would be better but I think with the topic it would be harder to find better sources unless there was a scholarly article on the topic.
Organization
[edit]Great job reorganizing the article and making it more visually appealing with the helpful headers. Overall you did a great job in making the article much better looking for the audience and helping the reader so much.
Images
[edit]I think that more images revolving the area would be an interesting addition in the future which would help make the article better and bring out certain points brought up in the new editions of the articles.
Final notes
[edit]I think the article is so much better than the original one. I think a little more information regarding the geography and other unique facts on the site would be interesting. Obviously including more images would help the most and overall would make the article so much better.