User:Mjkonate
Article review
[edit]I visited the Phora (Rapper) page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: early life and the misleading definition of musical style.
Early life
[edit]During the description of the early life of Phora, the article has a lot of misleading information saying the the person starting his music career because of his father and being a tattoo artist where he states in his song "Weaknesses" [1] that one of his best friends who died from alcohol is the one who told him to pursue music along with him. It also goes on to say that the artist survived a stabbing and two shootings in 2015 where as the stabbing happened in 2012 and the shooting took place in 2014 and 2105. It also doesn't include that a big part of his influence to pursue music came from his struggle with religion and being treated bad or talked down to but others in church as he states in his song "Sinner Pt. 2"[2] As I said before, the article has a lot of misleading information and not enough detail.
Musical style
[edit]In the information given about Phora it is said that his music style can be "defined by the two producers Eskupe and Anthro Beats", but granted the artist has multiple songs before he ever started working with them. For also refers t his own music a rap on all his social medias such as Instagram, Twitter, and even Facebook as well as in his music.
Summary
[edit]In the end, the article has a nice start and is definitely an upgrade from not having a page at all but I'd say the page is "decent" but definitely has a long way to go before it can be seen as a "good" page. As the artist grows and more fans come and edit the page and add more information, I am sure the page will develop nicely. As of what I see, the page can use more citations and event by event details as to how the artist came into the light of success from when he was 7 to today. It is definitely a incomplete background of the person.
(As apart of this assignment I made an edit to the page. although I tried to sign it but I don't know if it worked.)
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- ^ Phora YoursTruly (2016-06-05), Phora - Weaknesses [Official Music Video], retrieved 2017-06-09
- ^ Phora YoursTruly (2017-04-27), Phora - Sinner Pt. 2 [Official Music Video], retrieved 2017-06-09