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Paralytic agents are not suggested for use in sepsis cases in the absence of ARDS, as a growing body of evidence points to reduced durations of mechanical ventilation, ICU and hospital stays.[1] However, paralytic use in ARDS cases remains controversial.[1] When appropriately used, paralytics may aid successful mechanical ventilation, however evidence has also suggested that mechanical ventilation in severe sepsis patients does not improve oxygen consumption and delivery.[1]
- ^ a b c Dellinger, R. Phillip; Levy, Mitchell M.; Rhodes, Andrew; Annane, Djillali; Gerlach, Herwig; Opal, Steven M.; Sevransky, Jonathan E.; Sprung, Charles L.; Douglas, Ivor S. (2013). "Surviving sepsis campaign: international guidelines for management of severe sepsis and septic shock: 2012". Critical Care Medicine. 41 (2): 580–637. doi:10.1097/CCM.0b013e31827e83af. ISSN 1530-0293. PMID 23353941.
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[edit]Thanks for sharing these improvements. I have a few notes:
- You did a nice job adding your citation and placing it in the text
- Is ARDS defined earlier in the WP article?
- Can you try to add more lay terminology (common English) to your suggestion? I know it is hard to dub down something so technical, but try to make it so someone who is not in medicine can understand it.
- Add a citation after every sentence
Great work so far JenOttawa (talk) 17:13, 6 November 2018 (UTC)