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User:Thekevanator/Jeshua Anderson/Brierbach Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Thekevanator

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User:Thekevanator/sandbox
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Jeshua Anderson

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead

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I enjoyed your reorganization and more in depth summary in the Lead. I thought your introduction was well executed and clearly highlighted this individual's talent. You highlighted what was to come in the rest of the article while not giving too much detail. I thought the Lead was relatively strong.

Content

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I thought the content overall added was informative and relative to the topic. I think you are on the process of getting this article up to date; I like how you added more current information such as his coaching career, just needs some more content if available. All of your content is relevant that has been added.

Tone and Balance

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I thought the content was neutral, and no changes need to be made on tone and balance in my opinion, other than adding a little more in the coaching section if possible.

Sources and References

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All of your content appears to be referenced except the high school statistics section; I could be wrong on this. The rest of your sources seemed thorough and diverse; links worked as well.

Organization

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I thought you did a great job maintaining good organization of this article; all content added was to the point and the article flowed well in a chronological development. The only thing I noticed was to maybe check capitalization of some of the events he participated in in your Personal section.

Images and Media

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Both images added were great contributions, well captioned, and fit the article well. Overall, I thought you did well in advancing this article. Aside from the couple of actions to check on that I mentioned, I think your article is developing great! Good work!