User talk:Azurashi/sandbox
DerikWP Peer Review
[edit]Hi Azurashi,
I added a couple comments to your sandbox page. This article seems pretty well developed for most parts, but there is still plenty to expand on. Especially in the recent years, there have been some huge advances in wearables that you could definitely include.
DerikWP (talk) 17:23, 25 March 2016 (UTC)
Blin1095 Peer Review
[edit]Hi Azurashi,
I made a couple comments regarding the structure of the article. Some parts are a bit hard to read, perhaps changing the language would help. Overall, the article seems pretty well made besides some wording. There are some places that need expansion and cleaning up, I've addressed some issues in comments in the draft. The 2010s wearable section seems a bit lacking in the technology. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Blin1095 (talk • contribs) 19:50, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
DerikWP Review x2
[edit]Howdy.
It looks like you're making some good progress. The comments you've added stating your intentions seem to be pretty solid. I've added several specific comments throughout the article that you can review. Feel free to let me know if you need a second opinion on anything!