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Hi Natalia! Loved reading your article, your fungus has some cool medical properties! Overall, I think the information you have is great!! I think there are just a few minor ideas I had for improving clarity. First, more could be added about discovery- how and where did they find it? Also you mention its widespread now, but is there a place where it is more common? These things don't necessarily need to be added but are interesting facts you can use to bulk up this section. I loved that you made food spoilage and medical significance their own sections. However, I think you should move these down to underneath growth and physiology. Having it after these headings gives more of a context... we can understand why it grows on certain foods due to its growth requirements. Lastly, I really like that you included case studies. It makes it super interesting and more fun of a read. My suggestion for this would be to make this it's own subheading after medical significance and talk about them briefly. In doing this you would tie in the importance of the discovery of your fungus in medical advancements? (or do this in history perhaps?).

Great job using wiki links as well! Continue to add them throughout the sections :)

Cjwalker (talk) 19:35, 25 October 2017 (UTC)Cjwalker[reply]

Hello!
Interesting points, I enjoyed reading about your fungus! I really liked how you added a section regarding its medical significance.
Just a few things I'd like to comment that I think can help you out!
First, I noticed that your History section only had a couple points. I found an article by Moslem et al. (2010), that makes its first discovery of your fungi on imported apples from Saudi Arabia. It might not necessarily fall into your History category, per se, but it would be interesting to note that it's discovered to cause blue mold decay in a commonly eaten fruit like apples. Here it is: https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/20367389. Here is another case where your fungi is found in apples: http://pubmedcentralcanada.ca/pmcc/articles/PMC3768942/. It may be interesting to note its consistency of being found in this fruit.
Also, your second point under Medical Significance, maybe you can elaborate more on what types of fungal infections this mycotoxin gives rise to. Perhaps a quick look at https://www.drugs.com/monograph/griseofulvin.html and their scholarly references at the bottom may help. Specifically, I believe it treats dermatophytosis.
Under Physiology, maybe just put in brackets what CzA means for first-time readers. What color are the colonies?
All in all, great job and keep at it! Hope these points can help. || Rachelleisidro (talk) 02:56, 27 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]