User talk:Option forword
February 2011
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Welcome to Wikipedia, and thank you for your contributions. One of the core policies of Wikipedia is that articles should always be written from a neutral point of view. A contribution you made to William White (administrator) appears to carry a non-neutral point of view, and your edit may have been changed or reverted to correct the problem. Please remember to observe this important core policy. Thank you.
Please also have a look at Wikipedia's reliable sources policy, and the policy regarding external links. Thank you. bonadea contributions talk 17:13, 18 February 2011 (UTC)
There are two issues with the sentence you added. Firstly, the sentence was copied verbatim from an external source which violates Wikipedia's policy on copyrights. Secondly, the phrase "the museum emerged as a world-class education attraction welcoming almost 1,000,000 visitors" is not neutral - it appears to be written in order to promote a positive picture of White rather than to provide information. To look at the sentence in more detail, "emerged as" is marketingspeak for "became", "world-class" is subjective, "education attraction" is difficult to understand what it means, and "welcoming" is marketingspeak - the neutral word would be a form of "have". Please note that even if the information is added with more neutral (and non-copyrighted) wording, the external link you provided as a source is not appropriate per Wikipedia's policy for external links used as references. A reference for the increasing popularity of the museum and/or the number of visitors would have to be a secondary source, not a press release/blog post written by the person himself or his company. --bonadea contributions talk 18:06, 18 February 2011 (UTC)