User talk:Qaniaf
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[edit]Hello, Qaniaf, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 01:47, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Overall, I think you've obviously made a lot of progress on this article. Here are my notes:
I think adding the Early Life section was a great addition.
I would take out the "actually" in "Addison's parents actually got divorced."
You could maybe find a better photo of her.
The following sentence I think could be more factual and less subjective if that makes any sense. "The 41 year-old and 19-year old have kicked it off ever since and what seems now to be best friends as they are often seen with each other" so maybe change it to something like "the two stars are now often seen with each other"
I just think taking out "what seems now to be" would add more to your article to make it more factual
The activism and philanthropy section was a great addition
Does the artist for the music video she was in have a wiki page you could link?
Change "On that same month, Addison released a weekly" to "In that same month, Addison released a weekly"
When talking about the podcast, "only exclusively" is redundant so take out "only"
Instead of saying "Rae was given the chance to become a presenter" I would recommend just saying "Rae was a presenter" to fit the tone of wiki articles
Is she still in the Hype House?
I really enjoyed the relevant information you added to the article, I look forward to seeing the progress you make on it!
Sarahhelennicholson (talk) 21:01, 30 January 2021 (UTC)
Peer review
[edit]Hello Qaniaf, I am sorry it took me so long, but I have finished your peer review. If you need help finding it you can look through my contributions to find it. Goodluck ! TylerOliver7 (talk) 07:26, 1 February 2021 (UTC)
Peer Review Respond
[edit]Hi Sarahhelennicholson,
Thank you so much for your feedback. I really appreciate the minor details that you found that needed to be fixed, even though it's a small mistake, but it can really affect the tone and upbringing of the article. As for the image used, I already thought of using a better picture that can clearly represent her but I can't seem to find any more pictures of her that are freely licensed. I have searched in the search.creativecommons.org website and the picture that is already displayed is the only one available.
Qaniaf (talk) 07:13, 6 February 2021 (UTC)
Peer Review Respond
[edit]Hi TylerOliver7,
Thank you for your feedback and I really appreciate your kind words for my contributions to the article. I'm going to fix some wording on it since now that you've mentioned it does sound that I am portraying her in a good light rather than a neutral one. As for the image used, I already thought of using a better picture that can clearly represent her but I can't seem to find any more pictures of her that are freely licensed. I have searched in the search.creativecommons.org website and the picture that is already displayed is the only one available. I am still further adding information to the article as I'm searching for new topics and sections.