User talk:Sunday Seeker
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Welcome to the wiki fam!!! Nickihoj5695 (talk) 17:19, 5 October 2016 (UTC) |
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[edit]Hello, Sunday Seeker, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:23, 5 October 2016 (UTC)
Peer Review on Gold Nanoparticles in chemotherapy
[edit]Hi Sunday Seeker,
I read your section on Drug Vectorization and it seems really good, at least the parts that I were able to dissect and understand (this information is really advanced and I am so impressed by all of your knowledge on it!).
To start, I noticed that the lead is super brief in this article, and I think you may be able to easily add some body to it. The lead should somewhat debrief what is about to come, giving readers an idea of what they can find in the article before they scroll down. A couple sentences identifying the major headings could be helpful. This is a good way to add critical and needed information to an article in a fairly easy way.
In the Drug Vectorization section the wording is concise which is helpful to an untrained reader. In the second paragraph the first sentence seems somewhat useless. Instead of a blanket statement, get right into the critical information. In the third sentence, I would suggest removing “For example” because it does not seem to fit in with the encyclopedic tone of the article. It could even be combined with the following sentence, and be rephrased to something like “Ligands for hormone receptors can act as targets for the AuNPs considering that 80-90%......” It seems that the facts about breast cancer tumors and prostate tumors comes before the information about ligands and receptors. Additionally the sentence “This role is now…” needs to be reworded because there is a mistake and the word targeted is used twice (I am really unsure of the meaning of this sentence as is).
In the third paragraph the second sentence does not seem to be credible by Wikipedia standards. No self-published studies and trials information should be reported here. Only well reviewed and verified information should be sourced in the article. I am not sure if you added source #19 but official websites are not valid sources for Wikipedia (this is a cancer.gov source, not a third party reviewed source). Additionally, the format of the final sentence in that paragraph is odd and does not read naturally.
Overall, I think it is most helpful for me to read each sentence in the paragraphs and make sure that it is relevant to the heading “Gold nanoparticles in chemotherapy”. Information should be in logical order, because it is an encyclopedia. There does not need to be style or creative ways of presenting the information. These are more overall comments about writing with Wikipedia. I think you added a very strong section that is very informational. Keep up the good work!