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- Nominator(s): Epicgenius (talk) 14:23, 7 October 2024 (UTC)
This article is about yet another building on Wall Street in New York City. This time, it's an office skyscraper that was built in 1929–1931 as a bank headquarters before being converted to residential use. The building has some notable architectural features including a curtain-like limestone facade, a polygonal red room with glittering mosaic tiles, and (originally) an executive lounge with a triple-height ceiling. Even the site, at the foot of Wall Street, was once deemed one of the most valuable sites worldwide. The structure may not be the tallest building in the area, or even on the street, but in my view at least, it's one of New York City's lesser-known Art Deco masterpieces.
This page became a Good Article four years ago after a GAN review by SurenGrig07 and Hog Farm, for which I am very grateful. After some more recent copyedits, I think the page is up to FA quality. I look forward to all comments and feedback. Epicgenius (talk) 14:23, 7 October 2024 (UTC)
- SC prose
12 days and no visitors?? I'll start the ball rolling shortly. - SchroCat (talk) 06:13, 19 October 2024 (UTC)
- "Voorhees, Walker Smith Smith": should be "Voorhees, Walker, Smith, Smith & Haines" – including two commas
- Oops. I've added these. Epicgenius (talk) 01:03, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- "Upstate New York" should be "upstate New York"
- "Upon the building's opening, Irving Trust occupied the basements, lowest ten floors, and uppermost three floors of 1 Wall Street": "of 1 Wall Street" isn't needed as you open with "Upon the building's opening"
- Removed. Epicgenius (talk) 01:03, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- "the Red Room did not have permanent furniture, but it did have chairs and desks": I'm not sure I follow this?
- Whoops, I must have gotten distracted. Suffice it to say that it had chairs and desks, so I've changed it. Epicgenius (talk) 01:03, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- "black on the ceiling.[28][69] The mosaic gradually becomes lighter near the ceiling, thus drawing visitors' attention toward the ceiling": is the ceiling involved here...?! Maybe trim or rework slightly here
- I have reworded this too. Epicgenius (talk) 01:03, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
Done to the start of History. More to come. Overall, an enjoyable read, with not much for me to pick up on. - SchroCat (talk) 07:48, 20 October 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks for the initial comments SC. I've fixed the prose issues you've raised so far. Epicgenius (talk) 01:03, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
Continuing...
- "18-story Manhattan Life Building, completed in 1894, was located in the middle of the block at 64 Broadway.[113] The Manhattan Life Building": a bit of tweak to avoid the close repetition?
- I've reworded this. Epicgenius (talk) 13:37, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- "mid- and late 1920s": hyphen for late-1920s
- "though the windows were shaken": This reads like anthropomorphised windows a little; maybe just "though the windows shook"?
- Fixed. Epicgenius (talk) 13:37, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- "Voorhees, Walker Smith Smith & Haines were hired": should be "Voorhees, Walker, Smith, Smith & Haines" with commas
- I fixed this yesterday when I was addressing your first point.
- Epicgenius (talk) 13:37, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- "Bank of New York": as you refer to BNY shortly afterwards, this should be "Bank of New York (BNY)"
- "BNY Mellon opened a museum on the 10th floor in 1998": I though the BNY/Mellon merger and renaming was in 2006 or 07? I'd be inclined to keep the name as "BNY" for all references pre-merge, then move to "BNY Mellon" post merge (with a passing reference to the name change)
- Oops, yeah, that slipped my mind. BNY didn't actually merge with Mellon until 2007, so I've clarified this. Epicgenius (talk) 13:37, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- "Additionally, in 2007,": I don't think the "additionally" adds anything here – it makes it look like a forgotten add-on.
That's my lot. A long, but interesting read that I enjoyed going through. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 10:10, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks again for the review @SC. I've addressed the rest of your issues now. Epicgenius (talk) 13:37, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
- Support. All good from me - nice bit of work. - SchroCat (talk) 14:50, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
Source review
[edit]I'll pick up on this too. - SchroCat (talk) 06:13, 19 October 2024 (UTC)
- Check the capitalisation on the titles – there are some lower case in there that need to be capitalised (FNs 12, 63 are the ones in the first column that caught my eye, but these are examples only and there are probably more)
- Ditto there are some caps that should be lower case (FNs 8, 34,43, 97 are the ones in the first column that caught my eye, but these are examples only and there are probably more)
- FN24 " Skyscraper Style :" Rogue space before the colon
- Wider searches show no major sources overlooked, and the coverage seems to be adequate for FAC requirements
- SchroCat (talk) 08:00, 19 October 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks for the source review SC. I'll fix the ref titles on Monday. – Epicgenius (talk) 01:31, 20 October 2024 (UTC)
- I think I've fixed all the remaining titles now. The tool I was using didn't consistently capitalize or lowercase some conjunctions, so I changed these manually. Epicgenius (talk) 13:37, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
Image review: Pass
[edit]- All images appropriately licenced, so a pass on this one - SchroCat (talk) 08:00, 19 October 2024 (UTC)
Prose review by Generalissima
[edit]Very solid piece. I went through and fixed some out of order cites, and wasn't able to find anything errant or out of place - so support from me. Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 23:28, 23 October 2024 (UTC)