Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Chagatai Khan/archive1

Chagatai Khan

Featured article candidates/Chagatai Khan/archive1

Nominator(s): ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 02:06, 24 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about Chagatai, the second son of Genghis Khan and Börte (and the third to be brought to FAC). He lived a fairly good life—probably better than any of his brothers—and was the only one to get a state named after him personally; not even Genghis managed that. If successful, this nomination will be used in the WikiCup. I hope you enjoy. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 02:06, 24 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

image review

File:Funérailles_de_Tchaghataï.jpeg: source link is dead. Nikkimaria (talk) 05:03, 24 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed Nikkimaria. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 21:55, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by CMD

Surprisingly short article for the founder of a Khanate! Shows you something about Mongol records I suppose.

Very interesting to see the Tsagaadai Khan transliteration in the image. I suggest that this nametag is included in the alt text as well, so screenreaders may share this interest.
- I had an idea that this should be done, but I wasn't entirely sure.
Speaking of that transliteration, it's not in the lead note on transcriptions. A quick google seems to indicate it is not unheard of.
- It is a Mongolian transliteration which has fallen out of use as worldwide scholars interact more and standardised forms have emerged. I could remove Ca'adai for the same reason.
  - Is there a particular reason not to include old prominent transliterations in the note, appropriately noted as outdated?
The lead somewhat begs the question as to who excluded him from succession. It also implies that there was a sort of formal succession. Is this how the sources word it? Assuming the default is passing along to the eldest male, the body also doesn't explicitly explain why he was in contention, ie. why Jochi wasn't, given his legitimacy was apparently accepted.
- Succession relied both on the thoughts of the previous ruler and the skills/experiences/popularity of the next. All a ruler's primary sons, and even occasionally his brothers, were eligible. As mentioned later, although Ögedei was Genghis's successor, the support of key figures such as Chagatai were essential in ensuring his accession. I have clarified that Genghis excluded Chagatai from succession in the lead; would more detail in the body be helpful?
  - More succession detail in the body would be helpful. Questions that immediately come to mind are what were societal expectations around succession, what happened to Jochi's position, what happened during the two year(?) transition from Genghis to Ögedei.
"first son definitely", should this be "definitively"?
- I think both work, but changed.
Do we know the mothers of Balgashi, Sarban, Yesu-Mongke, and Baidar?
Do we know how he built (or commanded to be built) and maintained these roads?
- No to both, sadly. Blame the records.
Is it possible to get more clarity on which parts of the narrative exactly Atwood disputes? The way the Siege of Guranj paragraph is written, I came away with the impression the story of Jochi Chagatai disunity being solved by Ögedei was historical fiction, but the next paragraph implies that it was at least partially true.
- That is the difficulty—even if Atwood is correct in his theory of revisionism/propaganda, it is entirely possible that divisions between Jochi and Chagatai did delay the capture of the city. I have tried to focus a little; let me know if that works.
Given the land ruled is described as reaching a river in Transoxiana, "governors of the sedentary lands in Transoxiana" has an unclear geographic scope.
- I think "settlements" is more understandable, even if it loses a tiny bit of accuracy.
  - I think the more immediate question is, did Chagatai lack control of just the cities in Transoxiana, or within all his territory? (Was his territory synonymous with the concept of Transoxiana?)
It should be made clearer that Khorasan was not a sedentary city.
- Done.
"mother of his heir Güyük", I assume this was Ögedei's heir, but are talking explicitly designated heir, presumptive heir, or eventual heir?
- The latter two; Ögedei did not have an explicitly designated heir.
  - Could the text say "presumptive heir" then? Perhaps earlier succession info would also help contextualise this. Relatedly, what is the "However," in the next sentence for. The word is a chekhov's gun for Ögedei's succession that is never resolved.
"Yesülün accused one of his stewards", the subject of "his" is unclear, I thought it was Batu.
"Chagatai was succeeded" should probably specify succeeded "in central Asia" or similar, given the text already covers succession as senior Genghisid prince.
"Although Chagatai's loyalty to nomadic customs meant that he constructed no more than pools for waterfowl, storehouses, and small villages". Didn't he construct a highway system through western China?
- Clarified all; for the latter, I presume they were military constructions which served well in the short-term but were not necessary for trade or other non-military movements.

Absolute classic move by Ögedei with that cup. The navbox at the bottom says he was the "Khan of Chagatai Khanate", I suppose that's a tricky anachronism to avoid. CMD (talk) 08:41, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Agreed on both counts. Thanks for the comments Chipmunkdavis; responses above. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:45, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Some replies above. CMD (talk) 15:31, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Matarisvan

Hi AirshipJungleman29, my comments:

Link to Al Altan (Alaltun) as done for the other Genghisid siblings?
"by his father, Balgashi, Sarban": suffix "as well as" after "his father", so we know that these are Chagatai's named sons and not those given little regard.
Could we add some details here on the siege of Otrar, say a small paragraph?
When did Chagatai and Ögedei join Genghis at Samarkand, and when did the city surrender? Consider adding?
How did he utilise the Uighur officials in his realm, as we have mentioned here?
In the biblio, link to Hodong Kim and Peter Jackson?

That's all from. Will try to do a source review soon. Cheers Matarisvan (talk) 10:12, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]