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2011 Garmin-Cervélo season

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I've listed this article for peer review because…I'd like to get it to FA. It's really that simple. I think it's quite potentially good enough, but it would be very good to get more and fresher eyes on it.

Thanks, Green-eyed girl (Talk · Contribs) 18:07, 20 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - general comment, lots of opinion and unencyclopedic phrasing throughout, suggest you get an independent copyedit done.

Any reason why there's no en-dash being used in the team title per WP:DASH?

After a long discussion in late 2009, the consensus at the manual of style was that names of cycling teams that consist of two sponsors should be written with a hyphen and not a dash. (See here.) That is the convention that the cycling project has followed since.--EdgeNavidad (Talk · Contribs) 19:52, 27 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The 2011 season ..." what season? What competition?
"perhaps chief among them " opinion, not encyclopedic. Could just say "including".
" 26 victories in 2011, 25 of which officially count" pardon?
Suggest you link Tour de France.
"Also.... also... also" repetitive.
Strange ending to the lead with the sacking of someone just after the first race. Reads a little odd to me.
In the tables for riders coming and going, there's an inconsistent level of linking, e.g. "Ramunas Navardauskas" joining has no ref, while Kirk Carlsen leaving has none either.
What's a "field sprint"?
I'm not sure the source used suggests the result was declared "moot".
If you haven't mentioned the riders full name in prose, I suggest you do so the first time.
"The team was active at" is a very odd saying for me. Do you mean they took part in the various competitions?
"Farrar just missed out on the podium at Kuurne–Brussels–Kuurne. He took fourth...." merge.
"race in 18th place 27 seconds " comma after "place".
Our article has Giro di Toscana not Giro della Toscana.
"had few noteworthy performances " reads like a newspaper rather than an encyclopedic article.
I think you should adopt a consistent approach to the use of hyphens, unspaced and spaced en-dashes in the names of races which go from A to B, right now it looks messy.
"the race and the entire cycling world were turned sideways" again, tabloid-esque. Stick to facts, this is an encyclopedia.
Avoid squashing text between images.
Rider column doesn't sort correctly.
Don't have blank cells for Location.
Don't mix date formats in the refs.
Are author names First Last or Last, First? Be consistent.

The Rambling Man (talk) 07:20, 25 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]