Wikipedia:Peer review/Architecture of Mac OS X/archive1
Written all by myself, based on documented technical notes from the Apple Developer Connection (Apple Computer's group for Mac developers worldwide). I have included diagrams, an explanation of what Mac OS X actually is, see also section, references, categorized the article, and tried to make it as easy to understand as possible, with wikilinks to other relevant pages for terms that need detailed explanation to be able to become understandable by a non-computer literate person who may be reading the article. It would be nice to know if my article can go onto Featured article status, because I think with creative feedback and the right changes made it fits the criteria. Thanks! — Wackymacs 09:11, 25 October 2005 (UTC)
- Not bad. It still needs:
- More resources and citations,
- expansion of the darwin stub and,
- some work with the images. Clairify where they are from. If you can't, redraw the idea with basic imaging software and upload it as your own work (I think, but am not sure, that this is allowed). Also, low rez graphics would speed up the load time, which was oddly very slow on my decently fast computer.
Keep up the good work! —Preceding unsigned comment added by HereToHelp (talk • contribs)
- Thanks for the comments on the article, I have added more specific reference links to the pages I actually used on the Apple Developer Connection website. To be honest, this was my only source, as well as other wikipedia articles, because Apple have documented everything in detail.
- I don't think there is anything wrong with the images, all the images state why they are fair use and state their source as well, and also state which article they are being used in, and have a brief description.
And they are low resolution really, but the compression I did was rubbish (the first image is 52kb alone), probably why load time was a bit slow for you, however the speed at which Wikipedia loads depends on your Internet connection speed, and the current status of the Wikipedia servers.OK, I have compressed all the images, they are now all considerably lower in size, espicially the first one which is down from 52kb to 16kb. I'm going to expand the Darwin section.Done, it now says what it needs to.
— Wackymacs 08:23, 26 October 2005 (UTC)
- WOW, MAN, you must be the best tech-head writer there is! I've done a long copyedit on it, and inserted numerous inline queries. Please check through, because I've probably introduced factual errors. I do hope you nominate this as a FAC, and that you can work out a way of using all of the images without copyright violation.
Two personal requests: What's the difference between 'crash' and 'hang'?
AND
How do you key in the curly apostrophe—I can only access this by keying in (ampersand)rsquo(semicolon), and would love to do it in one keystroke.
I wonder how they'll react to the technicality of it all in the FAC room. I'll certainly defend it; I hang around there all the time. Tony 14:57, 26 October 2005 (UTC)
- Not sure I'm a tech-head writer, however I am a Mac OS X software programmer, which sure explains partly why I made this article. Thanks for the very positive feedback, and thanks for your copy-edit, that was some serious reworking you did there. Wow to you too! :) I haven't found any factual errors yet, I'm still reading through all your edits. Well, as I stated before, I don't think the images are copyright violations because they are fairuse (reasons stated on the images), I can always recreate those diagrams in Word or OmniGraffle or another app that can make diagrams. I'll answer your personal request on your User talk page. Thanks again for the encouragement and help! — Wackymacs 18:56, 26 October 2005 (UTC)