Talk:Antoine Ephrem Cartier/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:50, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "1836–March" space either side.
•  Done

• "businessman famous for helping develop" -> "businessman who assisted in the development"
•  Done

• "the town of Ludington" is "the town of" necessary?
•  Done

• Five out of six sentences start with "Antoine" in the Genealogy section, needs mixing up a bit.
•  Done

• "Antoine had six brothers and two sisters.[3] By 1895 only" merge, perhaps "Antoine had six brothers and two sisters,[3] but by 1895 only"
•  Done

• "Canada on May" comma after Canada.
•  Done

• "in the Maskinongé village church" overlinked.
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• "Canada for Chicago" link Chicago.
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• "across the lake" what lake?
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• "contracted with enough log-needy mill owners to make " log-needy is tabloid speak.
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• "that 50,000,000 linear" 50 million
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• "venture. They succeeded. Word got around" not encyclopedic writing.
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• "home 1860 - 1877" unspaced en-dash.
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• "considerable timerland" timerland?
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• "Some of Cartier's business axioms " Cartier's business axioms included...
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• "in 1878, Cartier built a Victorian style home at the northeast corner of Ludington Avenue and Lavinia Street near downtown Ludington. The house is

now Ludington House, a bed and breakfast." In, not "in", and this isn't referenced.

•  Done

• "the Democratic party" link.
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• "Manistee city council for four years" unreferenced.
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• "Cartier family original proverbs" are these really even notable? If these proverbs are notable, I'd like to see evidence that someone else has

referred to them other than the book, written by a Cartier....

•  Done = Removed from article

• Ref 4, en-dash, not spaced hyphen. Where's the rest of the citation info?
•  Done

• Ref 7, en-dash in year range.
•  Done

• Ref 9, en-dash in page range.
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• Same for refs 13 and 14.
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• " Images of America - Ludington 1830 - 1930. Chicago" en-dash and unspaced en-dash.
•  Done

That's my lot. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 21:09, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for review. I'll get started on resolving the issues tomorrow, after a good night's sleep. Really, I mean it this time. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:23, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

• @The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:19, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man and Doug Coldwell: The CS1 templates automatically display page ranges with an endash, but {{sfn}} does not, so I made a request at Template talk:Sfn#Add automatic endash for page number range? GoingBatty (talk) 22:14, 8 September 2021 (UTC)