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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 07:05, 9 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Progression

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  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

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Criteria

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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    • "On 27 May, 6 officers and 300 gendarmes..." should "6" be "six" per WP:MOSNUM?
      • Comparable quantities should be all spelled out or all figures per MOS:NUMERAL
    • "Main Ustaše Headquarters was tasked..." is "Main Ustaše Headquarters" a proper noun? Or should the sentence start like this: "The main Ustaše headquarters was tasked..."?
      • No, Main Ustase Heaquarters is a proper noun, it was the Ustase equivalent of OKW, for example.
    • "...Herzegovina comprised 4 per cent Croats, 28 per cent Muslims...", should this be "four per cent" per WP:MOSNUM?
      • See above.
    • Repetitive language "...by vilifying the Serb population, who, according to Tomasevich, comprised around 75 per cent of the population...", specifically "population" twice in the same sentence, I wonder if it might be possible to reword? (suggestion only)
      • reworded.
    • "... in Trebinje shot nine Serbs and arrested another fifteen..." should this be 15 per WP:MOSNUM
      • See above.
    • Is there some missing punctuation here: "On 1 June, the residents of the village of Donji Drežanj near Nevesinje refused to co-operate...", specifically should their be a pair comma around "near Nevesinje"?
      • done.
    • "In response, the Ustaše killed a large number of Serbs and burned their homes..." do we know how many were killed? "a large number" seems subjective and might be better expressed as a figure if it exists.
      • We don't, and Marijan doesn't consider the source reliable, I've removed "large", for the reasons you state.
    • "On the afternoon of 3 June..." I wonder if something like "That afternoon..." might work better as you have already given the date in the previous sentence? (suggestion only)
      • Good point, done.
    • Repetitive prose here: "during which the Ustaše suffered several casualties, the Ustaše burned down four villages..." specifically "the Ustase" twice.
      • Have reworded, see what you think.
    • Prose seems a little repetitive here too: "... the Poglavnik of the NDH, Ante Pavelić issued orders that threatened that anyone ...", wonder if this might work better: "... the Poglavnik of the NDH, Ante Pavelić issued orders which threatened that anyone..." (suggestion only)
      • done.
    • This seems a little unclear to me: "...but the 19 Ustaše hostages were killed instead..." was this 19 Ustase that were killed or 19 hostages held by the Ustase that were killed?
      • clarified, it was the hostages held by the Ustase.
    • Not sure this is a sentence: "South of Bileća, rebels destroyed the gendarmerie post in a village, killed seven gendarmes...", would it work better as: "South of Bileća, rebels destroyed the gendarmerie post in a village, killing seven gendarmes..."
      • Agree, done.
    • Typo here: "By 7 July, NDH forces had regained full control over the all towns and transport routes..." specifically "the all towns"...
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    • Article is well referenced with all major points cited to WP:RS.
    • No issues with OR that I could see.
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    • All major points seem to be covered without unnecessary detail.
  • It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
    • No issues I could see.
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
    • No issues here.
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
    • Images all seem to be free / PD and have the req'd information / templates.
    • Captions seem ok.
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