User talk:Clh1806/sandbox

I think you have added a lot of good content to this wikipedia page in this new section. One suggestion I have would be to mix up the structure of the sentences in the first paragraph, just to improve the flow for the reader. I'm not sure that you would have to list the 5 reasons but could just include them all within the paragraph. Also, I like that you brought up "internal triggers' to wearing hearing protection. I think you might be able to expand on this a little. I also added a minor edits and added "including" to the last sentence. I'm not sure if this is grammatically necessary but seemed to sound better.

Peer review by Katie

Which article is this going to be added to? It isn't clear. You have good ideas but I think you need to clean up your sentence structure because it is repetitive. The best part of your writing is that it is easy for the average person to understand.

These are my suggestions for improving your writing: Put the reasons that workers don't wear hearing protection into a list. You could also give a brief explanations why these reasons are not good reasons. You could add using a hearing loss simulation to increase motivation. I feel like that would be a very effective technique. Couldn't you also test their hearing before the work shift and after a work shift? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kthra (talk • contribs) 01:26, 5 March 2017 (UTC)